P4 - Second Draft of Script

Second Draft of Script:

Second Draft of Script Feedback:

For the second draft of my script I received feedback which followed a similar theme to the feedback I received from my first draft and involved me just adding in more detail of the setting that the characters were in and to describe the action of characters more. I also received feedback about my dialogue and just writing the dialogue in the way the characters would actually speak for instance writing "cos" instead of "cause".